The biggest change that I will be making in my essay is to the thesis. In order to make the body paragraphs mesh together better, I need to change my thesis to a bolder claim that better links the paper together. As far as a new claim, I was thinking something along the lines of “If someone needs to harm others in order for the betterment of themselves it is acceptable as long as they do not physically harm someone.” This is something along the lines of what I think I will change my thesis to. Other then changing my thesis, the majority of the changes I need to make are grammatical spelling changes that can be fixed with some re-reading.
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